Odyssey Unknown
Odyssey Unknown
Twin golden coins fly, churning in the night, then fall and spin, as if for eternity, in the dust.
The shaman takes them and flips them staring blindly into their identical faces with his milky white eyes before swallowing their price down his throat, licking his painted lips in satisfaction, offering me a revolting grin.
His bony figure gestures me to proceed.
My passing has been paid for.
Before me the desert shines in a color unnamed, lighting up an endless creature of alien material and ancient foundations.
The Labyrinth.
I quiver, but walk.
Soon I am no longer here.
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05/10/2012 at 3:22 pm
Strong voice, Cindy, spoken into the void. Not comforting as I wait to find out if my grandfather will survive the morning, but we do have these sorts of ruminations.
Minor typo in Para2: should “starring” be “staring”?
06/10/2012 at 9:21 am
My prayers are with your family John. Now that you’ve said it, I wished I had written something brighter
Thank you for commenting and for spotting the minor wrong.
05/10/2012 at 4:36 pm
oooh Cindy how powerful & menacing was this? Excellent, really strong piece
07/10/2012 at 8:34 pm
Thank you Marc! So glad you liked!
05/10/2012 at 6:19 pm
Really like this, Cindy. =) Dark and strange.
07/10/2012 at 8:35 pm
Thanks John
Dark and strange is a passion of mine!
P.S. I like your new? hairstyle!
06/10/2012 at 10:33 pm
Yes, dark, and quite poetically so.
I am intrigued, I feel the narrator may be on a quest, into dangerous territory, more to come perhaps?
07/10/2012 at 8:36 pm
Thank you for commenting Steve! Well, come to think about it I might be able to put this piece into a bigger picture. A dangerous quest it is!
07/10/2012 at 3:19 pm
Very short, but very poetic piece from you, Cindy!
07/10/2012 at 8:37 pm
Thank you Icy! I have a few of those up my sleeve
Glad you liked!
09/10/2012 at 11:27 am
Often journeys in life can be stranger than expected. I found him swallowing the coins to be extra creepy. Nice work Cindy
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